Peer review (이정현)

According to the rubric above, what grade would you give this essay? Why?
4점. narration부분이 좀 더 명확해야 할 것 같다.

How does this essay need to improve to get a better grade?
인터넷 신문과 종이 신문에 대한 더 자세하고 다양한 부분에서의 설명이 있으면 좋을 것 같다. 

Thesis
What is the thesis?
- Paper news won't disappear despite the Internet news has invaded the domain of paper news.

Is the thesis clear and debatable?
 잘 모르겠다. 인터넷 신문이 종이 신문의 영역을 침범한다는 것이 가능한가...? 영역 침범이 아니라 대체하는 것 이라고 생각한다.

If you (The reviewer) wrote this essay, how would you have written the thesis?
- Paper news won't disappear even the Internet news' effect is getting bigger. 

Any other thoughts?
No

Classical Argument
Can you easily identify the 5 parts of the classical argument? If no, what parts are missing?
Yes

Does the introduction catch your attention? Does it comfortably lead to the thesis? 
Yes/ Yes

Does the narration give all the necessary background information to understand the topic?
이 글을 읽는 데 큰 지장은 없었지만 내용 강화가 조금 더 들어가면 좋을 것 같다.

Does the confirmation adequately support the thesis?
Yes. 다만 인용 문구들을 요약하면 더 좋을 것 같다.

Does the refutation and concession address a realistic counterpoint? Does it adequately dispute the counterpoint, or respond in a reasonable manner?
Yes/Yes

Does the conclusion summarize the article and address the larger significance of the thesis? 
Yes

What suggestions do you have for improving the classical argument structure?
Narration 강화

Persuasion
When you started reading the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis? 
agree

When you finished the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?
agree

If your mind changed, why? What parts of the essay were persuasive?
X

How could the author enhance the persuasive parts of their essay?
인용문을 요약하고 더 다양한 사례들을 들으면 좋을 것 같다.

Research
Is the author using research effectively? 
Yes

Is the research from appropriate sources?
Yes

Are the sources obvious?
Yes

Are the pieces of evidence relevant to the thesis or essay?
Yes

Are there any parts of the essay that need evidence to support the claims?
첫번째 의견에서 한 사람의 발언을 토대로 뒷받침하고 있는데 더 다양한 사례가 있다면 좋을 것 같다.