Peer review (임진아)

According to the rubric above, what grade would you give this essay? Why?
3점. narration부분이 좀 약하고 conclusion이 좀더 명확해야 할 것 같다.

How does this essay need to improve to get a better grade?
narration을 더 자세하게 쓰고 conclusion에서 의견을 강화할 수 있는 요소들이 포함되어야 할 것 같다.

Thesis
What is the thesis?
- Reading education is suitable for development of children.

Is the thesis clear and debatable?
 Yes

If you (The reviewer) wrote this essay, how would you have written the thesis?
same

Any other thoughts?
No

Classical Argument
Can you easily identify the 5 parts of the classical argument? If no, what parts are missing?
Yes

Does the introduction catch your attention? Does it comfortably lead to the thesis? 
Yes/ Yes

Does the narration give all the necessary background information to understand the topic?
narration 부분이 약간 더 길고 구체적이었으면 좋겠다.

Does the confirmation adequately support the thesis?
Yes. 

Does the refutation and concession address a realistic counterpoint? Does it adequately dispute the counterpoint, or respond in a reasonable manner?
Yes/Yes

Does the conclusion summarize the article and address the larger significance of the thesis? 
Yes 하지만 좀 더 보강이 필요한 것 같다.

What suggestions do you have for improving the classical argument structure?
Narration, Conclusion 강화

Persuasion
When you started reading the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis? 
agree

When you finished the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?
agree

If your mind changed, why? What parts of the essay were persuasive?
X

How could the author enhance the persuasive parts of their essay?
예시들을 좀 더 구체적으로 배열하면 좋을 것 같다.

Research
Is the author using research effectively? 
Yes

Is the research from appropriate sources?
Yes

Are the sources obvious?
Yes

Are the pieces of evidence relevant to the thesis or essay?
Yes

Are there any parts of the essay that need evidence to support the claims?
No